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Point-of-view audit for head-hopping and filtering
Check the scene below for point-of-view discipline problems. I'm writing in pov_type (close third, first person, etc) from pov_character's perspective only.
Scene:
scene_text
Flag, with quoted lines:
1. Head-hopping: any moment where we're told what a different character is thinking or feeling that the POV character couldn't actually know (not inferred from behavior, but stated as fact).
2. Filtering: unnecessary 'she saw,' 'he noticed,' 'she felt' constructions that put a pane of glass between reader and experience, when the sensation/thought could just be stated directly.
3. Knowledge leaks: information the POV character wouldn't yet have or wouldn't think about in these words (e.g. a character noticing their own 'furrowed brow').
4. Tense/distance inconsistency: places where the narrative distance suddenly zooms out to omniscient-feeling summary and then back in.
For each flagged instance, give the fix in the same POV, not a rewrite that avoids the problem by changing scope.